One Star Short Stories #1

EIGHT-OH-FIVE

A short story by L.A. Mullins

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At 8:05, Mina Park stood on the third step of a ladder, reaching for the plug behind the OPEN sign.

Golden Pear Market had closed five minutes earlier. The fish counter was scrubbed. The cash drawer had been removed from the register. Mina's bus came at 8:32 from a stop four blocks away. The next one came at 9:37, which was a ridiculous amount of life to lose to a bus shelter.

Two teenage girls knocked on the glass door. One flattened both hands against the glass and mouthed, Please. One thing. The other filmed her begging.

Mina thought it was a food emergency. She climbed down, unlocked the door, and told the girls they had five minutes.

"Thank you," the taller one said. "You're literally saving us."

They walked every aisle. They filmed themselves holding soup packets, seaweed, frozen dumplings, and a melon neither intended to buy. The shorter girl asked whether the salted plums were good.

"They are good if you enjoy an argument with your own mouth," Mina said.

The girl laughed. Mina smiled despite the bus.

At 8:18, she reminded them that the store was closed. At 8:23, they were comparing candy by color. They left at 8:26 without buying anything.

"Thanks, ma'am," the taller girl called.

Mina locked the door again, climbed the ladder again, and unplugged the sign. She reached the bus stop as the 8:32 bus's red taillights turned the corner.

The next morning, Mr. Vale called her into the office. Two new one-star reviews filled his monitor.

The first said the store had locked its doors early. A rude old Asian cashier had refused to let two girls enter even though they arrived before closing.

The second said the cashier had followed them through the aisles, raised her voice, and made them fear for their safety.

Mina searched both reviews for a time. Neither review mentioned a time.

No one wrote that they disliked her face. They wrote what they thought her face had done.

"Camera," she said.

Mr. Vale opened the security recording. At 8:05, Mina climbed down from the ladder. At 8:06, she unlocked the door and stepped aside. The girls entered. For twenty minutes, Mina kept several yards between them while they browsed and filmed. At 8:26, they left.

"All right," Mr. Vale said. "You let them in."

"After closing."

"Yes."

"And I did not follow them."

"No."

Mina waited. Mr. Vale closed the video and reopened the review dashboard.

"These make eight," he said.

Before that morning, six customers had named Mina in one-star reviews. She had supposedly thrown change, hidden sale items, refused a return without checking it, and glared at a boy until he cried. Each time, Mina had supplied a receipt, a witness, or camera footage that contradicted the review.

"Those were untrue too," she said.

"I know some of them were."

"All."

"People opening the store page won't see this video, Mina. They'll see eight complaints about the same employee. Eight looks like a pattern."

"Eight lies also look like eight."

Mr. Vale turned his monitor slightly, as if the rating belonged to the machine and not to him. Golden Pear had been open eleven months. Its score had dropped from 4.1 to 3.5 overnight.

"I need you off the register for a while."

Mina checked whether the camera recording was still open on his screen. It was.

"You watched it."

"I believe you. But the store is new. I can't have customers afraid of the person at the front."

"They were not afraid."

"That isn't what the reviews say."

He offered her work in the stockroom, but not all of her hours. The back did not need a full schedule, he explained. He presented the demotion and the smaller paycheck gently, like napkins beside something spilled.

At sixty-five, Mina could lift a twenty-five-pound bag of rice. She did not know what twelve of them would do to her right wrist.

"Who will train the new cashier?" she asked.

Mr. Vale reached for the schedule before she finished asking. "You, if you don't mind."

She trained him.

His name was Owen. He was nineteen, cheerful, and unable to tell cilantro from flat-leaf parsley. Mina taught him the produce codes, which coupons could be combined, and how to give older customers time to count their coins without rushing them.

Before her first stockroom shift, she checked the two reviews again. Mr. Vale had answered both.

WE TAKE CUSTOMER SAFETY SERIOUSLY. THE EMPLOYEE INVOLVED HAS BEEN REMOVED FROM THE FRONT OF THE STORE.

The taller girl had marked his response helpful.

By the twelfth bag, her right wrist had swollen tight against her watchband. Mina moved the watch to her left.

At 8:05 that evening, someone knocked on Golden Pear's locked door. Owen checked the wall clock, then looked down at the register. Mina heard the knocking from behind three rows of boxed noodles.

This time, no one opened the door.

Author's Note

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This story was inspired by something that happened to my sister. Names, locations, dialogue, and identifying details have been changed, and some events and consequences have been fictionalized.

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